Tuesday, October 19, 2010

One Shot Wednesday....


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When did my jokes stop being funny?
When did our love depend upon money?
When did we start fighting at the drop of a hat?
When did my cute butt become suddenly fat?
When did I become evil because of my snoring?
When did my advances become selfish and boring?
Our once Grand Illusion has turned into a sham....
Way too much water, has gone over the dam!

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If you have a short story, poetry, or prose in your head.
Post it on your blog, and go tell the One Stop Poetry Crew...Here!
See Ya Tomorrow....Peace!!!
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35 comments:

  1. Brian MillerOctober 19, 2010 at 5:40:00 PM EDT

    oh man...i felt that one in the pit of my stomach...a sickening feeling at that point...nice one shot g daddy!

    (ps. fixed your link...it went to last weeks)

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  2. Vodka LogicOctober 19, 2010 at 5:44:00 PM EDT

    unfortunately I can relate..well written

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  3. clean and crazyOctober 19, 2010 at 5:50:00 PM EDT

    very well written. you captured the feeling perfectly

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  4. MeOctober 19, 2010 at 5:58:00 PM EDT

    Oh yeah. Kindred spirits, me & you.

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  5. tuberiderOctober 19, 2010 at 6:22:00 PM EDT

    Nicely done, simply & powerfully put.

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  6. PattiKenOctober 19, 2010 at 7:02:00 PM EDT

    Galen, this is amazing. You're the one who ROCKS! I can so relate to this, and I know I won't be alone.

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  7. UnknownOctober 19, 2010 at 7:48:00 PM EDT

    well... that one tugged at my spleen.

    first visit here
    nice place ya got:)

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  8. AnonymousOctober 19, 2010 at 8:02:00 PM EDT

    Whoa... this one really hits home. Fierce, G-Man.

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  9. One Prayer GirlOctober 19, 2010 at 8:34:00 PM EDT

    You're killing me G-Man......too many questions with too much truth to face and too many sad answers.

    .....and once the water is over the dam, there is no bringing it back.

    This is beautiful, but heartbreaking.

    PG

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  10. TinaOctober 19, 2010 at 9:41:00 PM EDT

    Oh G, I've been there. This is heartbreakingly real. And so well crafted. Gotta say, this is my favorite of yours. Your fan,
    Tina

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  11. SuziCateOctober 19, 2010 at 9:53:00 PM EDT

    good one shot on love gone bad...perfectly portrayed.

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  12. MillieOctober 19, 2010 at 10:12:00 PM EDT

    Did you write this about me? You've captured that mid-life falling apart crisis feeling perfectly.

    Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/10/19/song-of-my-heart/

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  13. MaureenOctober 19, 2010 at 10:18:00 PM EDT

    I can imagine the dust-up that would arise were any one of those questions asked. Love the last line.

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  14. MonaOctober 19, 2010 at 11:00:00 PM EDT

    So many questions, probably one answer : Marriage!

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  15. moondustwriterOctober 19, 2010 at 11:16:00 PM EDT

    Ya know poetry on paper is eloquent and inspiring. Living the stuff we (poets) write is another ball of wax.

    You have evoked alot of genuine emotion through this my friend.

    There are many who appreciate you a great deal.

    Hugs from the Moon

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  16. javajazzOctober 19, 2010 at 11:44:00 PM EDT

    well now,
    here's a happy subject
    everyone can relate to...!
    ps love the new paint job
    on the blog, baby...
    xolanalovesyouxo

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  17. CloudiaOctober 20, 2010 at 12:06:00 AM EDT

    All in the eyes-

    then in your words.



    Aloha from Hawaii

    Comfort Spiral

    ><}}(°>

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  18. TALONOctober 20, 2010 at 12:07:00 AM EDT

    Oh, you tugged my heartstrings with this one, G-Man. Yes, there is that nasty flip side...

    A sad poem, but a great one.

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  19. DianneOctober 20, 2010 at 1:46:00 AM EDT

    Ah Ha! I was right all along,
    other people do feel this way!

    ooops, I didn't mean that.

    Hahaha, time to take inventory, 50 - 25 equals 25.
    50 + 25 equals 75,
    I think I have 5 more before I decide.......
    Fab Di

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  20. ShadowOctober 20, 2010 at 3:47:00 AM EDT

    whoa, a blast of reality... well done, g-man!

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  21. AkelamaluOctober 20, 2010 at 5:35:00 AM EDT

    It's sad when that happens.:(

    Thankfully it hasn't happened to me and my love.

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  22. BubbaOctober 20, 2010 at 6:53:00 AM EDT

    Nice rhyming, G-Man... I hope it's not too literal.

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  23. PoeticHeartOctober 20, 2010 at 10:33:00 AM EDT

    Unfortunately know this place all too well...very well done! ~April

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  24. dustusOctober 20, 2010 at 11:55:00 AM EDT

    Amazing! Witty, nice flow, and impacts like a punch to the gut.

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  25. Myrna R.October 20, 2010 at 1:34:00 PM EDT

    The truth can be painful. You revealed it mercilessly.

    Great one shot!

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  26. ClaudiaOctober 20, 2010 at 2:10:00 PM EDT

    this was very well written galen - and i think lots of people can relate and i always wonder where this turning point starts that takes us from one side to the other - sad thing..nice one shot

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  27. Belinda MunozOctober 20, 2010 at 2:24:00 PM EDT

    Heartbreaking! Excellent oen shot.

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  28. Katherine KrigeOctober 20, 2010 at 2:54:00 PM EDT

    Oh G-Man, You and C make a sad, but amazingly poetic pair. Love the rhymes, but feel for you with the meanings behind them. Be well

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  29. PattiKenOctober 20, 2010 at 3:47:00 PM EDT

    I commented last night. But I just noticed that One Shot's Mr. Linky says: "G-Man (fixed)"

    I didn't know you were broken... ;-)

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  30. Ben LanghinrichsOctober 20, 2010 at 8:57:00 PM EDT

    You captured the sadness and mystery behind why two can be so close and yet grow so far apart. Very sad when it happens.

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  31. limeOctober 20, 2010 at 10:35:00 PM EDT

    way too common sadly. you've captured the heartache well.

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  32. Gabriela AbaloOctober 21, 2010 at 6:52:00 AM EDT

    time to move on ;)

    awesome one shot!

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  33. secret agent womanOctober 21, 2010 at 7:18:00 AM EDT

    That's very sad.

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  34. CatyOctober 22, 2010 at 2:00:00 PM EDT

    so sad when that happens and it happens way too much! Nicely done :)

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  35. RNSANEOctober 28, 2010 at 5:56:00 PM EDT

    That is so sad...and happens too often.

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